Woman Warrior Revised
Mar. 6th, 2024 07:39 pm![[personal profile]](https://www.dreamwidth.org/img/silk/identity/user.png){kind=small}
sgatazmyI heavily expanded/revised an old 2007 fic, and I'm so excited by the finished product. It's revisions like these that help me see how much I have grown as a writer.
Title: Woman Warrior
Rating: Gen/Friendship
This gen fic sees Rodney and Teyla injured off world. It was written back when Teyla was still hiding her pregnancy and it imagines what if Rodney figured it out, while off world, and now desperate to protect Teyla. The feel of this fic is a bit different than my normal in that it's Teyla and Rodney both trying so hard to protect and support the other, but also completely failing to communicate.
So what needed fixing?
(1) When I first wrote this fic, the episodes were still airing and it was a race to beat the show to the next step. So if I wanted this not to be instant AU, I needed to post it before Teyla told anyone on the show. Several scenes weren't as well developed as I wanted and I definitely needed more time to develop the conflict between Rodney and Teyla.
(2) My world building needed some help and my bad guys were...well...not exactly developed. Motvations were unclear.
So what was revised/expanded?
(1) A lot more time with the infirmary scenes! I added a scene where Teyla and Rodney are upset and failing to understand the other. I feel this scene really brought the story together.
(2) I fixed up my bad guys and their motivations a little bit. Not a lot, but hopefully enough to make the scene come alive.
(3) I reconsidered some action scenes and moved them in different directions
The result is a story that is 40% longer than the original and I think richer as a result.
Title: Woman Warrior
Rating: Gen/Friendship
This gen fic sees Rodney and Teyla injured off world. It was written back when Teyla was still hiding her pregnancy and it imagines what if Rodney figured it out, while off world, and now desperate to protect Teyla. The feel of this fic is a bit different than my normal in that it's Teyla and Rodney both trying so hard to protect and support the other, but also completely failing to communicate.
So what needed fixing?
(1) When I first wrote this fic, the episodes were still airing and it was a race to beat the show to the next step. So if I wanted this not to be instant AU, I needed to post it before Teyla told anyone on the show. Several scenes weren't as well developed as I wanted and I definitely needed more time to develop the conflict between Rodney and Teyla.
(2) My world building needed some help and my bad guys were...well...not exactly developed. Motvations were unclear.
So what was revised/expanded?
(1) A lot more time with the infirmary scenes! I added a scene where Teyla and Rodney are upset and failing to understand the other. I feel this scene really brought the story together.
(2) I fixed up my bad guys and their motivations a little bit. Not a lot, but hopefully enough to make the scene come alive.
(3) I reconsidered some action scenes and moved them in different directions
The result is a story that is 40% longer than the original and I think richer as a result.
